Black Ghost

Like Amelia said above, I really didn't feel as much a connection with the characters and the situation as much as I wanted to. I'm not sure what's missing, whether ...

Thanks for the comments, guys. ^_^ Fantasyartist>> I totally agree about the "it" thing. I changed it right away, so thanks for catching that. Squallz>> Your comments are so awesome, ...

Sounds like a war-story to me. Something about being in the heat of war, and how it changes you and all that? Sounds interesting, at any rate. A Winter Memory ...

Nice poem. Although you had a typo here: A song you know to well. Should be too . Also, I noticed that the repetition of "starry sky" didn't work so ...

In order to get more critiques, you're going to have to space this out a bit more. Make sure you have a space between paragraphs and pieces of dialogue. This ...

I can't sleep now. Snowflakes drifted down from the heavens. They spiraled and swirled in the winter air as if dancing to a symphony. The trees were wrapped in blankets ...

It make me feel satisfied, like I've been keeping something bottled up in me for so long and then finally let it out...like that. XD MM

O.o These are really cool! Some of them are very inspiring. ^_^ MM

Hehe, looks like it was fun. ^_^ MM

... Just thought you should know. :smt017 MM

9/10 That's hilarious. :lol: MM

Oh, I really love the imagery in this one. All your description are very vivid and awesome, and it seemed to flow pretty well too. Not much else I can ...

It was good poem, in my opinion, although maybe a few lines could be changed. Actually, I think this one: authorizing the mind to control his muscles. There isn't anything ...

I don't really see any strong meaning in this poem. All you're basically doing is describing death and destruction, which is a bit boring. Poems need to have a little ...

Yes, like Evanglina said, you just need to make it longer, and expand upon the ideas you already have. Experiment with different words and phrases, so you can come up ...